Does the development of SNS exert a beneficient influence on human's life?
(SNS = Social Network Service)
I have negative thoughts about social network service. A social network service refers to an application or site that enables building social networks or social relations among people, especially with those who share interests and activities. The original purpose of SNS is really good, but nowadays I think that SNS have forgotten its own purpose.
SNS is a communication space before. On the other hand, people begin to exploit SNS like commercial exploitation or purpose of crime. Crime to use SNS occasionally happen all around the world. In the case of Korea, some of the people actually use SNS to do the sexual assault. In addition, SNS users are steadily increasing, so some people use SNS to public relations.
According to National Statistical Office, they surveyed people age 6 or older about using SNS in 2013. 67.1% of researchers make a reply that they use SNS in the past year. Above all, 35.8% of researchers use SNS during the week.
Besides, I think SNS is unnecessary part of a person's life. SNS is totally dependent on sight of other people. When many people post speech on their own SNS, they are always aware of the way other people are looking at this.
There was created for the individual to freedom of expression, but, now a days people distorted maker's intention. Many SNS user want recognition for others on their posting. For example, some people post a selfie on instagram, then they want to other people bum many 'like' button. To do that, they use a lot of hash tag that have nothing to do with their selfie, (For these people, there is a neologism like hashtag abuser.) In conclusion, I think the use of SNS is waste of time. Of course, reasonable utilization does not matter.
In conclusion, I think people nshould diminish the using SNS. (especially students to study) People must do day job before using SNS. People also don't need to bother other people's sight. We are the protagonist in our life!
<References>
Augenbraun, E. (2014, August 22). SNS. How Real a Risk Is Social Media Addiction? Retrieved December 9, 2015, from http://www.cbsnews.com/news/how-real-a-risk-is-social-media-addiction/
SNS. (2015, November 26). [T타임] ‘좋아요’에 집착하는 당신, SNS 중독? Retrieved December 9, 2015, from http://news.kbs.co.kr/news/view.do?ncd=3188632&ref=A
(2013, December 3). [통계청] SNS, 여러분은 얼마나 이용하고 계신가요? Retrieved December 9, 2015, from http://hikostat.kr/2199
Facebook Logo. (2015, July 15). Retrieved December 9, 2015, from http://www.firertc.com/blog/firertc-is-now-on-facebook
Instagram Logo. (2014, November 21). Retrieved December 9, 2015, from http://arkansasteachercorps.org/home/instagram-logo-005/
SNS is a communication space before. On the other hand, people begin to exploit SNS like commercial exploitation or purpose of crime. Crime to use SNS occasionally happen all around the world. In the case of Korea, some of the people actually use SNS to do the sexual assault. In addition, SNS users are steadily increasing, so some people use SNS to public relations.
According to National Statistical Office, they surveyed people age 6 or older about using SNS in 2013. 67.1% of researchers make a reply that they use SNS in the past year. Above all, 35.8% of researchers use SNS during the week.
Besides, I think SNS is unnecessary part of a person's life. SNS is totally dependent on sight of other people. When many people post speech on their own SNS, they are always aware of the way other people are looking at this.
There was created for the individual to freedom of expression, but, now a days people distorted maker's intention. Many SNS user want recognition for others on their posting. For example, some people post a selfie on instagram, then they want to other people bum many 'like' button. To do that, they use a lot of hash tag that have nothing to do with their selfie, (For these people, there is a neologism like hashtag abuser.) In conclusion, I think the use of SNS is waste of time. Of course, reasonable utilization does not matter.
In conclusion, I think people nshould diminish the using SNS. (especially students to study) People must do day job before using SNS. People also don't need to bother other people's sight. We are the protagonist in our life!
<References>
Augenbraun, E. (2014, August 22). SNS. How Real a Risk Is Social Media Addiction? Retrieved December 9, 2015, from http://www.cbsnews.com/news/how-real-a-risk-is-social-media-addiction/
SNS. (2015, November 26). [T타임] ‘좋아요’에 집착하는 당신, SNS 중독? Retrieved December 9, 2015, from http://news.kbs.co.kr/news/view.do?ncd=3188632&ref=A
(2013, December 3). [통계청] SNS, 여러분은 얼마나 이용하고 계신가요? Retrieved December 9, 2015, from http://hikostat.kr/2199
Facebook Logo. (2015, July 15). Retrieved December 9, 2015, from http://www.firertc.com/blog/firertc-is-now-on-facebook
Instagram Logo. (2014, November 21). Retrieved December 9, 2015, from http://arkansasteachercorps.org/home/instagram-logo-005/
Hello WooRi,
답글삭제I wrote about SNS, too, but my paragraph is different content. Please read my paragraph when you have time to write. Anyway, I sometimes think SNS is waste of time especially during exam period. I also agree that SNS users are always aware of the way other people are looking at this. However, I believe SNS has many function without function that people post their daily life. According to Financial News, people use SNS for safety check of Paris terror attacks. In doing so, using SNS is not like we're wasting our time. I read your paragraph well. It is a good writing. Thank you for reading my comment.
Have a nice day,
Jaekyoung
Dear Woori,
답글삭제As time pasts, social networking service is gaining many users and that amount of information is expanding also. I believe that the ability to filter out important information from such vast information should be developed.
Thanks,
Kyung Jun
Hi Woori,
답글삭제I'm not a SNS praiser, but I think your paragraph doesn't have any powers of persuasion. If you want to write a better opinion paragraph, you would better write to "should/should not" paragraph. Also, opinions such as "Government should regulate~" or "Government should not~" and citaion of experts will be more credible. I'll wait for more specific and interesting paragraph.
Best wishes,
Yeeun